公共英语考试:四级写作承诺要慎重
[考查要点]
考生应根据提示信息(中/英文)写出一篇150-200词的短文。提示信息的形式有主题句、写作提纲、规定情景、图、表等。写作时间约为35分钟。
承诺要慎重,不实承诺可能会导致很多社会问题
[题目要求]
A. Study the following cartoon carefully and write an essay in no less than 150 words.
B. Your essay should meet the requirements below:
OUTLINE:
1. Write out the messages conveyed by the cartoon.
2. Give your comments. (15 points)
【核心词汇】
make premises 做出承诺
duties and responsibilities 责任和义务
take…as… 把。。。看作。。。
absurd and ridiculous 荒谬的,荒唐的
come into being 形成
widespread empty promises 普遍的空话
【参考范文】
My view on So-called promises
As can seen from the cartoon, a hen is making promises that her eggs are all round and consist of shells, egg whites and yolks. In our daily life, many people, just like the hen, keep making such promises in which they take duties and responsibilities as virtues to be proud of.
Such promises, absurd and ridiculous even at the first sight, come into being mainly for two reasons. First, some profit-driven enterprises take advantages of such promises to win people’s trust and understanding——their advertisements are intentionally misleading and their behavior is sheer cheating. Second, some organizations and individuals, obsessed with fame and success, are by all means publicizing their deeds, but actually they just assume their own duty.
These widespread empty promises will do great harm to people as well as to the whole society. They will result in a dishonest atmosphere in our society——people will lose mutual trust and become more doubtful. As a result, the economic development of our country will be hindered.外语学习网
【黄金模板】
As can be seen from the cartoon, … . In our daily life, … .
Such…… and … even at the first sight, come into being mainly for two reasons. First (On the one hand), … Second(On the other hand), …
These widespread… will do great harm to people as well as to the whole society.
【文章结构点评】
首段共分两句,首句将母鸡承诺的两句话简练地描述了出来,次句立即进行类推(analogy),在日常生活中许多人与这只母鸡一样,把自己的责任当成了引以为傲的美德。
次段写此类承诺形成的原因,在主题句后分两方面来说。一方面,某些追逐利益的企业利用这样的承诺来骗取人们的信任和理解,其广告是故意的误导,其行为纯属欺诈。另一方面,一些组织与个人为了名声和成功大肆宣扬本来是自己份内应做的事情。
末段写这些承诺的危害——既危害了人们,又危害了社会。这些承诺会导致社会中不良风气的产生,人们会失去相互信任,变得更多疑。结果是经济发展受到了影响。
【重点句子分析】
首段首句的as can be seen from the cartoon是常用的模板句,make promises表示“承诺”,而sell, egg whine和yolk分别是表示“蛋壳”,“蛋清”和“蛋黄”。次句立即借助插入语just like the hen作一类比,说有些人总是作这样的承诺。
次段首句后两点来说:第一点中使用了破折号作进一步的说明,profit-driven和take advantage of分别表示“追逐利益的”和“利用”,破折号后的intentionally表示“故意地”,misleading表示“误导的”,sheer表示“完全的、彻底的”。第二点中使用了插入语obsessed with fame and success是一个过去分词短语,相当于一个定语从句,be obsessed with意即“着学于。。。的”;by all means表示“利用一切手段”,publicize表示“宣扬”,assume one’s duty表示“承担责任”,亦可用take on。
第三段首句之后有两句话:前一句中的result in表示“结果是。。。”,mutual trust表示“相互责任”;后一句开头的as a result起承接上句的作用,其后的hinder表示“阻碍”,亦可用affect。
注:以上作文主题及范文来自1998年考研英语真题作文,大家可以用这个来练习一下如何写图表作文。