2017雅思写作模拟试题:教育类话题
范文题目:
It is more important to choose to study a subject that interests you than a subject preparing you better for a job or career. Do you agree or disagree?
题目有关教育中的”课程选择“并联系职业规划。需要学生从”选择适合学生职业发展的课程“或是”选择自己感兴趣的课程“中做出选择。
范文相关分析:
Education is one of the key words of our time, however, people’s views differ greatly as to which should be the superior option of academic pursuit, to opt for courses conducing to future career or to focus on subjects that interest them. As I see it, compared with choosing subjects that can help young adults ready themselves for career challenges, to deliberately specialize in one’s favorite courses is more commendable.
首段的结构:
背景-争议主题介绍(1句复杂句)+观点(选择感兴趣的)
由于运用了一句复杂句,首段内容结构很清晰,也在首段就体现了写作者的水平。复杂句用”people’s views differ as to... to do...“这种形式替代“people’s views are different about...,some people...,the other people...”这种需要用多个句子,也比较模板化的形式。学生可以参考使用。其中也不乏一些比较好的词汇,如academic pursuit学术追求,career challenges职业的挑战,deliberately谨慎地,specialize专门从事 ,commendable很好的
Opting for the courses in which one takes considerable interest will enjoy more visible merits. First, one’s study motivation can be highly stimulated provided that one can choose subjects exerting a peculiar fascination on him or her. Conversely, people might generate career burnout even if they might get profit-making jobs.
本段给出第一个论点,学习感兴趣的课程的好处-激发学习动机,用两句话从正反两个角度-激发学习动机vs职业 倦怠-来论证。好的词汇,比如considerable相当大的,merit优点 , study motivation学习动机,stimulate刺激, provided that条件是,exert 施以影响,peculiar fascination特殊的魅力 ,career burnout职业倦怠,profit-making jobs高薪职业.
Also, taking one’s favorite subjects can fully tap his or her infinite potentials. Meanwhile, one can fully enjoy the process of learning and career life. Apart from that, it is also a sort of success if one can perfectly combine specialized knowledge with career ambition. Therefore, college students have sound reasons to select the courses that interest them.
本段给出其他论点,学习感兴趣的课程的好处-挖掘无限潜力、享受学习和职业、将兴趣和职业更好地结合。可参考用词有 tap his or her infinite potentials,career ambition.
Indeed, I have to concede that the acquisition of pragmatic courses might still have some benefits. Sure enough, job-related courses will help one outshine many candidates and successfully secure a decent job. That is why some people feel that education is a kind of investment and competitive courses such as engineering, science and technology can, in most cases, earn high interests. Thereby, what some people are concerned about is whether the course of their choice can lead to a profitable career. After all, career-related subjects can lay a solid foundation for climbing the career ladder.
让步段,实用性的课程也是有好处的,帮助提升就业竞争力。本段有很多好的表达方式,比如acquisition of pragmatic courses,Sure enough,help one outshine many candidates,secure a decent job,profitable career,climb the career ladder在职业上平步青云.
In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that even though choosing utilitarian subjects is never without merit, university students should still be encouraged to choose their favorite areas of study.
尾端重申观点:
应该鼓励学生选择感兴趣的课程。
总结:可以看到,写作者的英语功底很高,在很多表达方式上都没有“落入俗套”,在范文中没有出现某个概念是利用同一种方式重复表达的。很多词汇都可以加入同学们的“素材库”了。但是有一点,如果在内容中加入一些更具体的例子会更好一些。